MARIANA CHRISNEY
EDITING SAMPLES
Class: ELANG 350
Audience: BYU students who are choosing a minor or are interested in editing.
Instructions: Write a response paper for a student who is considering an editing
minor. Write your response paper in first person and explain why they should enroll
in the editing minor.
I helped the author trim down repetitive words and phrases throughout her essay. I
also gave her suggestions for a stronger thesis and helped her pick up the pace for
her essay.
Class: ELANG 350
Audience: BYU students who are choosing a minor or are interested in editing.
Instructions: Write a response paper for a student who is considering an editing
minor. Write your response paper in first person and explain why they should enroll
in the editing minor.
I helped the author trim down repetitive words and phrases throughout his essay. I
also gave suggestions on how to strengthen his thesis and how to tie in elements of
art and science so that his essay would create an image in the audiences’ minds. I
also helped him find statements that were vague and offered suggestions to clarify
certain terms.
Class: ELANG 410
Audience: LDS millennials and adults
Instructions: Write a short story for the blog Mormon Insights based on a talk from The Ensign.
I helped the author with the Mormon Insights style and gave her suggestions on how she can make transitions smooth in her essay. I also helped trim repetitive words and smoothed out her thoughts. (NOTE: The author gave me permission to use her name in this sample.)